Not bad- at least it's something that will hold my attention (BMW)!
Ever read "Politics and the English language" by George Orwell?
He defines some rules to clarify your writing and examples of what not to do. Funny thing is that he wrote in 1946 (pretty sure) and much of the problem still exists today.
Things like using the active voice rather than passive...
Here's a link, or feel free to google:
http://orwell.ru/library/essays/poli...nglish/e_polit